Tritina for an Avocado


You bear to me your avocado love
That I may taste of tenderness and sweet.
Your bliss of flesh, your fragrant heart,

A warmth that spreads through this my fervent heart.
Oh, to let me ravish you as spring’s love
Ravishes the branches with its verdant, sweet

Embrace. Oh, to let me press these lips, sweet,
Against your cheek, rain’s punctuative art
In kisses on the skin. Bear me thus your love –

My love, my sweet – your avocado heart.


46 comments:

  1. With a bit of milk and sugar, avocados are my favourite fruit.

    Short link - http://bit.ly/s4avocado

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    1. Milk & sugar! Now that's a new idea! I must try it.

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  2. Super pretty poem - avocado wonderful for this. What is the form? Obviously too short for sestina, but with the repeating end words? Very effectively done. k.

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  3. I've never associated sweet with avocado, but I am willing to go there with you in this luscious tritina, an extended metaphor from a man with a appetite, Mr. Semaphore!

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  4. Ah, avocados, you have to get them ripe, just so, and then in a bowl of milk and sugar... mmmm!

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    1. You know the first time I ever actually ate avocado was in Brazil in a milkshake - exactly as you say. I can see now - tritina.

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    2. Re: manicddaily's comment

      When I lived in Brazil more than 40 years ago, three popular flavors of ice cream were coconut, plum, and, yes, avocado. Besides vanilla and chocolate, those were the only flavors in most places. Last year, when I returned to Brazil, there were ice cream shops with hundreds of flavors, but no avocado. I wished I'd been able to stay long enough to try them all: mango, passion fruit, açaí, guava, tapioca...... but my favorite was still coconut, although chocolate/coffee/rum came in second.

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  5. Love "avocado heart"... great tritina.

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  6. oh nice...sweet and tender...avocados are elegant fruits in their softness..really like the emotions and passion in this.. and thanks for tending bar sir...tried my hand on one...stayed almost in line...ähem...smiles

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  7. I love avocados, and though I've never eaten them sweet, you provide the experience for me here, and on more than one level. Delightful.

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  8. It's a sweet, endearing poem — but avocados with milk and sugar? Sacrilege!!! One of my favourite fruits too, but scooped from the skin with a sprinkle of salt and pepper, or best of all a few drops of Tabasco. Delectable! I do agree they must be ripe.

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  9. It all sounds very yummy. Great Tritina Samuel, I think Marie Ponsot would be pleased :)

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    1. Ah, that's high praise indeed!

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  10. I haven't finished mine yet...came to read your example...it's lovely Sam and I love avocados..one of my favorite fruits. One question though...did you mean to say "art" instead of "heart" in the third stanza..just checking.

    Gayle

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    1. I had 'heart' there first, of course, then I came up with 'rain's punctuative art' was just a perfect phrase.

      I could put 'heart' there, of course, with the great heartbeat/rainbeat implication, but if I put 'art' I would get the implication of artistic daubing -and- I would still get the 'heart' allusion because the tritina form would force the reader to think about that word (which you did!), and not vice versa.

      And yes, I do tend to over-think things.

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  11. I've never eaten avocados that way - here we slurp them up as guacamole. Also yummm. Loved this. Thanks for the lesson on a poem form I didn't know. Your poem -- superb, as well as delicious.

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  12. nice....i rather like avacado...and i like the intimacy in this as well....and being ravished is not bad either....smiles....cool form man....i jacked it all up but, cool form...smiles.

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  13. So fun and unexpected! I wish everyone loved avocados so much. I only get to have them when the meal is just for me.

    This is a fun form. Thanks for showing how it's done!

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  14. Sam...the avocado is suddenly much more than dip for my chips! Just wonderful, Sam...you are indeed a master of the craft...and a closet foodie too perhaps? :)

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  15. Wonderful form and theme! Excelkent write, I wilk have to try tritinas.

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  16. Have never tried milk and sugar! Loved this, the form and the prompt!

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  17. Delicious, just like an avocado!

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  18. I love this avocado dish, served cold with milk and sugar, even more delicious ~

    Thanks for showing us how beautiful this form is...yours gave me sweet inspiration ~

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  19. I enjoyed your poem to an avocado, which proved itself to be a wonderful subject for the Tritina form you demonstrated for us. You are indeed a master poet!

    I just love avocado...use it most often in 'wrap' sandwiches and salads. Also, of course, guacamole.

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  20. Such an interesting form, not a villanelle, not a sestina, tritina.(Thank you for your introduction at dVerse.) You make it seem effortless. I love avocadoes, but have never had them sweet. Beautiful tribute to love--and the avocado. Thank you.

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  21. You give us the feeling you could have picked cumquats just as easily, for words spill from you like loose hairs from a long-haired cat, softly, spinning in the light, dropping down and in the lines. Terrific teaching tool, and fun poem.

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  22. Lovely ode...and thank you for this particular form prompt. I enjoyed creating within it. ~ Rose

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  23. Interesting form. Awesome write up, incorporating the historical background was both educational and engaging. I've always liked the sestina, so this should be fun. Great example here. Thanks

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  24. Delicious in form and topic. I lov avocados, but eat them with lemon and a light sprinkle of salt.

    I hope my tritina turns out as good!

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  25. Does justice to the aphrodisiac which is its subject.

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  26. Well the warmth without the locker room nudge that the fruit calls for...

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  27. Enjoyed this...sweet..and thanks for this new form I learned.....

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  28. Ah..aguacates...lovely fun you had with this..love it!

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  29. this almost made me give up when I first read it - it's sooooooo good. Thanks for sharing, and thanks again for pinting me to the form.

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  30. u make an avocado very desirable

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  31. Your poem was delicious! And I don't even like avocados!

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  32. This is fun to try, with or without the milk and sugar.
    I like the way you make the lines run into each other. Free, but not too free.

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  33. I only just begun tasting advocados...more specifically, guacamole. It is an acquired taste. Well done on the prompt!

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  34. Great avocado poem Sam! I must always try a new form. And also try the milk & sugar mix. I mirrored yours by writing on a capsicum. I was in a hurry and had revamped my old poem. Thanks for sharing!

    Hank

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  35. "rain's punctuative art/in kisses on your skin" this is no less than divine. Selecting an avocado can be a most intimate experience. Here is a delightful love poem and strong use of this tender form.

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  36. Avocado's are delicious as is this thank you again

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  37. I don't think it's about fruit :-) Sensual.

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  38. beautiful and sweet. I like how it holds within it a the possibility of being about something more than a fruit. I particularly liked the second stanza.

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  39. Great avocado poem Sam! I must always try a new form. And also try the milk & sugar mix. I mirrored yours by writing on a capsicum. I was in a hurry and had revamped my old poem. Thanks for sharing..

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  40. You're making us all hunger for your poetry. :)

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  41. Delicious poem for a delicious vegetable. :)

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