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The form is a ruba'i quatrain, popularly known from 'The Rubaiyat of Omar Khayyam'. The second line is a reference to Virgina Woolf, from 'To the Lighthouse'.Short link - http://bit.ly/s4B005
Love this! So much vivid imagery in so few lines. I especially love the strength of that last line. Nice!
and answered prayer def rings of hope...and i love the imagery in the route you take to get there...and so nicely done in so few lines man...
HI Samuel--I find this a bit difficult because I don't know enough about boron. I'm not sure of its chemical or symbolic properties--of course, I can sense some of it==and I'm assuming that the green is land,ho! and the boron has to do with some ship's signal, but I just don't know enough, so it's almost too succinct for me, or too dependent on the Boron. The language is beautiful certainly, but I am very conscious that I am missing things. k.
Or maybe green is the color of the flare only not land! I can see that arc in the sky, of the flare--I feel like I need a bit more because I can sense these meanings but I find it a bit difficult (as you can see.) Hope I'm not out of line. I am a very literal reader at times. K.
Sam, amazing. You take the mundane and make it leap off the page. That fourth and final line of this quatrain poem demonstrates your brillance. It made my heart leap when I read it. Why, it came from that magically gifted place you draw your inspiration from. I am a lover of short narrative verse. This one is special.
One other note/observation. That fourth line is peppered with some alliteration/rhyme--"flare" and "prayer;" something absent in the first three lines of verse. That fourth line is like a fine spice that gives a particular food its special flavor. This came to mind just as I was about to leave this page.
As always, Sam, you carve a moment out of particulars, so cleverly we are surprised anew that it surrounds us. Bravo.
Agree with Chris. Brought to mind Garth Brooks, "Thank God for Unanswered Prayers"...(yeah, I'm a little bit country and a little bit rock 'n roll). Loved the form (maybe you could cover this in forms down the road???) I have read several rubaiyats. I have a book of them about cats. Oh I must stop now.
That would definitely be an answer to prayer! What a horrifying feeling to be stranded in the ocean, particularly without a flare. You create quite a complete picture with few words. That is a gift and my favorite kind of poetry.
I do love what color can do for poetry, how it can create sensations based on the words it is paired with along with our previous experiences and ideas about the color itself. I love the simplicity of this, but there is such depth beyond the boundaries of the lines. Very much enjoyed..
Succinct yet eloquent. A bit like the flare itself against the dark sky. Beautiful. :)
The imagery of a boron flare as an answered prayer is inspiring.-Irene
Great imagery, expressed with an impressive economy of language. Loved it!
I loved the imagery, the compactness, and the form. Thanks for the helpful explanation you offered in the comment.
This is stunning! Offers so much not only to the eyes, but the heart and senses, thought provokingly clear and full circle! Amazing! xoxo
Cool form great poem. What was really weird is as I read the poem, the picture located near it seemed to be moving that the flash getting brighter and dimmer, but when I looked right at it, nothing. I know strange, but it kind of fit. Loved this.
..the space the clouds at last uncover... there's much to say about this space..uncovered and filled with hope...and you do it in such few lines ...masterfully sam...
The boron flare- boron being the gas used in the light of a lighthouse? Metaphorical maybe for someone travelling on rough seas, in turbulent times, looking for a sign, something to give them hope. Those signs light up for all of us when we need them. This was short and sharp- and I love the form!
I agree short and very sharp. Thanks for stopping by my site as I appreciate your words. I remember reading some of your poems, which are exciting with an intellectual base perhaps.gardenlilie.com
The sudden connection, the hope, the being saved from darkness, all very intense and real--I think whenever something in us really connects, there is always that flare.
Well, now I've discovered some rubies...I've discovered your work, and feel richer for having done so.
Masterful use of this form, from a poet whose work I grew up reading! The lines here just resound so thoroughly with that spirit, giving me hope that you will venture more in the same vein. The last lines were especially meaningful to me:over the ocean’s vastness, into sky:the boron flare of an answered prayer.
this is richly dense in imagery and suggestion. it shines.
hope in an open sky...this is beautiful.
Green is my favorite color and you just gave it a whole new meaning. Beautiful poem.
yes, green is one of my favorite colors. I'd like to think I'm a hope-filled person...
Wow. Short but very deep! Green is not one of my favorites, but this stanza captures so much of its beauty...well done!
Green is the color of prosperity and growth. now, your poem is a lovely prayer.
Boron flare--answered prayer. WOW! I see peeps nightly here on the beach at sunset...many praying for whatever good. What Excellent writer--you. So much communicated with so few keystrokes.Must say, how honored you made me, complimenting my attempt at limericked words. You are, however, amazing...I looked into a few archives.I've got to practice (violin) a bit before turning in. Thank you again, Samuel!
nice chemistry in the poemtwo senryu dedicated to the novelist
there's a purity in the last line.
This is amazing. So much to see in so few words... you brought an entire scene alive. Well done!
Succinctly vividly written! Excellent!
nicely enticing ;-) thank you samuelthough i myself would say that unanswered prayer of a flare feels like it's creating it's own needed answer, from the sender himself -best wishes ;-)
Such a beautiful poem.........absolutely lovely. Thank you so much for your kind and generous comments on my poem. I write about nature a lot, all my life it has been my most constant lover:)I especially loved your "over the ocean's vastness into sky." Gorgeous.
Love the color reference-- a peaceful way to start my day.
hope breaks through...excellent Samuel
Short but excellent piece!
Solid quatrain; nothing more is required to complete the Narrative - it feels complete. The rhyme to finish underscores the thrust nicely
An answered prayer is what we all dream of, isn't it.
Always perfectly lovely to read Samuel, I really love your poetry. :)
Boron flare, beautiful
the boron flare of hope arrived...beautiful
enjoyed this and its simplicity
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