Physicist and storyteller
A so-called 'square poem' has six lines and six words per line. You can read the lines horizontally as usual, but you can also read down the columns of words, and the poem should read exactly the same!Miriam Claire introduced me to them with a poem by Lewis Carroll - http://tinyurl.com/ylfryfj. I'd written one earlier, 'Bend to This' - http://bit.ly/s4bend2this - and had been working on a second one. Here it is.Short link - http://bit.ly/s4sboundme
I really enjoyed this but you got me all confused in the prompt you say "Classic square poems refer to poems where the number of syllables per line is equal to the number of lines." and here you say six lines and six words per line?? I am still curious which is it six words or six syllables per line or does it really matter ???????
If you read the article further, you'll see that a "classic" square poem behaves as you describe; but a Lewis Carroll square poem is different. A Carroll square poem doesn't care about the syllables, only the horizontal and vertical reading.
Wonderful job! This is not an easy exercise, as I know. I love the challenge to stay within the parameters and still say something meaningful -- as you have done! Bravo.
Excellent ..I have never heard of it before....nice work...bkm
Nice! I like the last column: "desolate cocoon dying deep tomb." Great alliteration! I'll have to try this myself. Great work!
GORGEOUS!! Very well done--and not an easy task, you're SO brilliant :)
One of your shorter pieces but still very impactful. I should try this form some time.....Brilliant execution.
I love it, I love it, I love it. :)
I know mine's wrong already, the simplest of 6 x 6 word poems wihtout the rhyme and repitition that it should contain. But I loved what you did with this here x Has strength.
from a psychological perspective, this has so much pain in it. you did a great job. zealous wives
Sam...this was HARD! You made it look easy...this seems effortless...NOW...I know different. I bow to you poet, and am off to resharpen my pencil.
haunting...nice how you were able to evoke feeling too...i did it...it was a beast....and yours sets the bar high...
Fantastic, I see why you wrote the prompt - beautiful and moving.
Absolutely beautiful...even more so considering the structure. I realize this will make no sense, but...I read the first three lines down (hard to follow the words downward beyond that) and somehow they struck me even more powerful.
It doesn't look square at all ~ I like the silent deep tomb ~
Excellent...I love what you wrote. Thanks for sharing this with us today.
Wow--so difficult to write up and down the same--and such a beautiful poem, no matter how it's read!!!
Bleak, bleak and dark--such unfriendly silence--cocooning in embers too gloomy to glow. No wonder the end is the tomb. I am learning that if I do not understand a poem at first, I should look to see if there is a disinterested form holding the reins. I love the sonnet form, but never felt it as restricting as this one! In the Square poem, I like most the last word ("tomb" in yours "please" in mine) simply because it is only said once. It's like the little crook at the end of the cat's tail that breaks the pattern.
Such beautiful sound here - I really like the alternating rhyme and the flow is lovely. But it's all so lugubrious and morbid with the sound - I mean that in a good way. Wrapped up like the cocoon tomb, so elegantly. k.
smiles...you challenged us big time with this prompt sam.. and of course did an excellent job...with both..great poem sir
Very cool. So good the square form really isn't the focus as you read it. To do a form with parameters like the square and for it not to be the biggest focus of the piece is darned near remarkable. Killer write Sam. Thanks
Complex in form and content.Well done you, as usual. Even though I baulked at the second demand of the challenge, I can appreciated a well-wrought result.
Fantastic! You have inspired me to have a go....
The form is a total source of awe and inspiration for me...I'm glad I got introduced to it at d'VersePoets.Your line "Me en ember muted in gloom" is simply toooo good! It's amazing how you've maintained the essence in your poem despite the challenging poetry form....brilliant !!!
Wonderful Samuel, this was a real challenge. You allowed silence to fold onto itself into the tomb. Feels like a circle but fits perfectly into the form of a 'square'.
You are a tricky, tricky bod, Samuel - good to make your acquaintance!
Thank for the great prompt Sam. I enjoyed it a lot and wracked my brain thru a disjointed night. And of course, you show me up with the best example of the form! :) Superbly done.
Wonderful Sam. Loved the alliteration and flow notwithstanding the form. Wish I'd had more time and could have linked sooner, but it was a challenge and didn't bend to my hand and mind as quickly or as well as I would have liked. Thank you for this. Also, and I know your time is extremely limited, but if you have the time I'd like your critique (not compliments) on The Empress of Peace. I am trying something different in it - a work in symbolism and want to know if you think it works. http://hollyheir.wordpress.com/2012/06/25/the-empress-of-peace/
Your Carroll square poem is stunning, Samuel ~ I found your prompt challenging and enjoyable
this is a rich, lovely use of the form, new to me -as of today. thank you for the grueling and inspiring prompt. ~jane
I really enjoyed the rhyme and tempo this created, beautiful! ~ Rose
I wish I had read this before I attempted mine.I have just realised how to do it. Good one. Clever Dick. Because you have lived in the UK you know this is not a rude thing to say:)
Thanks so much for visiting my site, I'm grateful you've taken the time to read. If you liked this selection, you can download a sampler of (or buy!) my books at the following links...- Sonata Vampirica - Sonnets from the Labrador- How More Beautiful You Are- Tango Desolado- War and Ablution...And, if you can, please leave a rating at Amazon.com. It's easy, and it does help a lot. ...Thank you!