You say you want a revolution
We all want to change the world
You tell me that it's evolution
We all want to change the world
- J. Lennon, P. McCartney
You talk about a #revolution?
You there, carrying the bayonet
Of Internet protocol, bearing
Elliptic cryptography’s body armour –
Listen – let me explain a few things.
Alongside the armies of salvation
March your trending hashtags #Tunisia
#Egypt #Jordan #Algeria #Yemen -
#7thcolumn at the squares of liberation.
You say you want a #revolution?
You there, standing in the plazas,
Surrounded by the salt of merchandise,
Armed with nothing but your placards,
Your Molotovs of #poetry; your comrades
Slumping in the streets of your suburbs,
Bloodied like a dried inkwell, swirled
In hake. You falter like a weathervane –
Listen – you are not alone. Raised with
Your fist our own, fingers together curled.
We all want to change the world.
You hear about the #revolution?
You there, despots, heedless in your
Palaces, your pyramids of gauze,
Your minarets of conjurement and smoke –
Listen – that is the sound of the great deluge
Bearing down upon the tined illusion
Of your gates, etching away the mortar
Of your garrisons, wave after furrowing wave
Sweeping your citadel in watery immolation.
You tell me that it’s evolution –
Let me show you how the comet
Struck down the ancient tyrant’s reign
And made it brittle bone, cowed in stone.
You say you want a #revolution? This is the
Word, meme, singularity – seize it, share it,
Chirp it, reddit, storify it, glorify it, tumblrd
And tubed, until we surge victorious,
Philosopher, mason, poet and serf,
#Freedom the final stone that's hurled;
We all want to #changetheworld.
The glosa is a form from the late 14th century and was popular in the Spanish court. The introduction, the cabeza, is a quatrain quoting a well-known poem or poet. The second part is the glosa proper, expanding on the theme of the cabeza, consisting of four ten-line stanzas, with the lines of the cabeza used to conclude each stanza. Lines six and nine must rhyme with the borrowed tenth.
ReplyDeleteThis glosa is an exposition of the role that social media has played in real historical change. The cabeza, in a twist from the usual practice of quoting a poem, quotes lyrics from the song 'Revolution' by John Lennon and Paul McCartney, of The Beatles.
Short link - http://bit.ly/s4revolution
Very courageous poem, I think. It speaks a language of revolution - the new language - hashtags and all! Some very lovely turns of phrase as well as original language. I especially love:
ReplyDeleteLet me show you where the comet
Struck away the ancient tyrant’s reign
And made it brittle bone, cowed in stone.
You say you want a #revolution? This is the
Word
I agree with Miri - stupendously phenomenal - love the form, content, flow and candor!
ReplyDeleteHow strange, the duality of those things that are timeless and those things that are of the immediate moment. On one side, there are things happening now and for each of us alive bearing witness, taking action, we usher in change for the future. This poem, the new media technology, the use of hashtags, the people, the places, etc... On the opposite side, those things have happened before and people bore witness, took action, and ushered in changes realizing a future that brings us here today. For example, a new poem, with fresh words and hashtags, following the glosa, a late 14th century poetic structure. I SIMPLY LOVE WHAT YOU HAVE CAPTURED HERE, SAM! Thank you, xx*KHC
ReplyDeleteHumbly, "A poem I wish I wrote." Marvelous Sam. I know the soul of Egypt, which cries for freedom, is echoed in these words. Brilliant sir, brilliant!
ReplyDeleteHow appropriate to take a set form from chivalric times to set the stage and fill the it with the characters, music, and technology of the present - so apt, such dramatic mirroring of events. You, sir, are a true bard! Well done. Gay @beachanny
ReplyDeleteWow - love the oppositions you used in this poem - love the use of the chivalric form,hash tags and the sentiments - this is so powerful
ReplyDeletenice. i am unfamiliar with the form, but i like it...i also like th inclusion of the hashtags making it all the more relevant...very nice done.
ReplyDeleteThis packs a powerful punch in light of the current situation in Egypt. Very nice. Thanks for your kind comment on my piece today.
ReplyDeleteWOW Sam, so incredibly strong, but somehow that does not surprise me with your amazing talent! :)Well Done! ~April
ReplyDeletepowerful, brilliant, intense! Loved it. xxJenne'
ReplyDeleteThanks for all the kind words, so far, when I started I thought this might be a risky blend of traditional and modern.
ReplyDeleteI've packed a lot into it - not only Lennon & McCartney, but allusions to 'Revolution' by Tracy Chapman, 'I'm Explaining a Few Things' by Pablo Neruda, and other compositions that touch on the theme.
Some other items which have come up in questions: Elliptic crypotography is an algorithm popular on mobile and smartphone platforms for securing communications. Twitter, Facebook, YouTube, tumblr, reddit, and the other references in the final incantation are all vehicles of the social network revolution.
I agree with the comments above. The way you incorporated the hashtags into the poem is really exciting and captures the feeling of this revolution. Your poem echoes the feelings that have filled the protesters' tweets.
ReplyDeleteExcellent piece, and a new and fascinating form as well. The message you are presenting is important, and very true--and by wanting to change the world, the world does change, even if in our human eyes the change is too slow, or not enough. If Lennon were alive today, he would be writing about #Egypt #jan25. Very well done, Samuel.
ReplyDeleteyes - we all want to #changetheworld.. i like the use of hashtags in your poem and how you combine the topic with these twitter hints and the 14th century form..
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Very powerful call... and the last lines were perfect...
ReplyDelete'#Freedom the final stone that's hurled;
We all want to #changetheworld.'
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/02/whispers-another-kind-of-valentines-day.html
Oh woww!! Those were some powerful lines there!! Intense and bang on target!! Your choice of words is so so effective in bringing out the message here...
ReplyDeleteTo the hypocrites of the world, who complain and crib, this is just the perfect dose!! It is we who have to take that first step... then there will be a march.. then there will be change.. then there will be true freedom...
A brilliant one shot, my friend!
I knew I saw hints of Tracy Chapman in this piece. An appropriate poem for the times.....Your talents are awe inspiring.
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