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unhinged pendulum--great sound here.
I like the religious undertones of this -- clutching at rosaries, lost souls. Well done.
I much enjoyed these in essence of spirits and souls, strengths grasping..."the journey home"
I like the rosary simile and the free fall journey home, I don't know if the climber survived, was there a safety line, it feels good to be left hanging!I also like the numbering, makes it feel like 4 frames in a movie played in slow motion.
Thanks, I'm happy the spiritual undercurrent worked. Good catch with the freeze-frames; numbering also emphasizes that the verses were built to work as standalone haiku.
beautiful words....great insight!
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not being a rock climber, i had to look up piton...quite a tragic and well told tale...i should have seen the forshadowing in the first haiku. lovely!
This worked really well. I like writing in haiku sets where each should stand alone. Loving mountains as I do I felt the sensations and feared the end. Excellent.
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