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alex: Hello you
leah: oh you’re here, how are you?
alex: Breathing, and you?
leah: i’ll be fine
alex: You’re on late tonight
leah: visited with my sis a bit
alex: Well, I’m glad you’re here
alex: I read your email
leah: i've not yet sifted through all the details of yesterday
alex: Neither have I
leah: someone said things end badly or they don’t end at all
alex: You’d have been happy if nothing had changed
leah: i’d have been content
alex: Content?
alex: Content?
leah: yes happy
alex: I'll always remember your passion for life
leah: i’ll always remember your devotion
alex: You could read my thoughts, finish my se
leah: sentences?
alex: lol
alex: I told you I’ve only fallen in love once in my life
alex: I lied
alex: It’s 3 times I’ve fallen in love
alex: And you’re number 1, 2 and 3
alex: What are you thinking?
leah: how i feel now is how i never wanted to feel again
alex: I’m sorry
leah: it's not fair
alex: Do you hate me?
leah: hate you for what?
alex: Crossing the line, asking you to cross the line
leah: no i wouldn’t say i hate you
alex: But?
alex: You have regrets
leah: no
leah: well i guess i regret not getting to go see annie together
alex: lol
alex: When you rediscover love, I won’t be there
alex: That is my biggest regret
leah: i wouldn’t say when
alex: Okay, if
alex: If you rediscover love
alex: My biggest regret is that it will be with someone else
leah: then that would be my regret too
leah: if
alex: It didn't have to be this way
alex: But you're the immoveable object
leah: and you’re the irresistible force
leah: and in the end
alex: We can't exist together unless one of us gives in
leah: no we can’t
leah: i'm sleepy now
leah: I’ll call you sometime?
alex: Yes I'd like that
leah: i'll talk to you soon then
alex: You take care of yourself
leah: you too
alex: Good-night, sleep well, pleasant dreams
alex: The sun will come out tomorrow
leah: : )
alex: I'll always lo
leah has logged out
alex: Good-bye you
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ReplyDeleteSo unorthodox and yet so moving.
ReplyDeletei know this conversation, stunning
ReplyDeleteThank You!
ReplyDeleteFunny how these conversations/communications disapear in to cyberspace...
ReplyDeleteouch man....the cut off there in the end...i wonder about this...is he genuine...online is hard to tell you know...you can say or be anything...even if they have known you in the past....i wonder what made him finally cross that line too....intriguing way to tell it too...
ReplyDeleteDang, Sam. What a great way to unveil a relationship. I love the tool of dialogue as a means of telling a story and "showing." Very effective write.
ReplyDeletethis is really cool...so much unveiled of their characters just by that chat conversation... very interesting development and leaves many questions open..but i always like when not everything is answered in a poem
ReplyDeleteClever evolution of character here. Novel -- as it is a poem, novel in word choice as well. It sets the tone and the time. Nothing intrudes so the end is a surprise. You met all the requirements here brilliantly.
ReplyDeleteGood to see a story unfold through dialogue
ReplyDeleteExcellently done. All the better for being uncommon. I appreciated its freshness and the many routes it could have gone.
ReplyDeleteSo much said here in a brief dialogue. Brilliant!
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
the breakup aftermath through IM, so much of intimacy now electronic. so very good
ReplyDeleteI like the reading between the lines this initiates, Sam--the whole of things meshing but not clicking, of being too close to right to easily let go, too close to wrong to hang on. Very innovative in approach, too, which gives it kick and immediacy. Always a pleasure to see where your muse takes you.
ReplyDeleteTouching... sad. I love your approach and the reference to Annie (i've always liked that song).
ReplyDeletethere is so much packed into this dialogue - I loved reading between the lines
ReplyDeletei enjoy your highly contemporary approach here. by the end, I find myself wanting to know more and feeling simultaneously satisfied with the mystery of it.
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