Physicist and storyteller
Are you sure you don't live nearby; you sure wrote the same steaming air. I like the analogy of the flat iron pressing out the corrugated roof. Wonderful imagery brought this poem to life.
the sun presses outthe roofs' taut corrugation. These are great lines. You can bring anything to the page and light the reader's eyes. Hope all is well.
I'm Martie's echo: "...wonderful imagery brought this poem to life." That's so true!
A month can blur into a "trellis of smoke" especially in summer. this poem reminds reminds me of a Tennessee Williams' play; which yes is a wonderful thing.
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