Physicist and storyteller
Something of a departure for you.... I think all poets should write spare, spare poetry from time to time. How much can one say in under thirty words?
"Three," "second," "one," "three," the progression really gives form to how much the speaker has to do to "get close." Even, "get close" is split into the next line, great choices. Excited to read more, please continue your great work!
Thanks so much for visiting my site, I'm grateful you've taken the time to read. If you liked this selection, you can download a sampler of (or buy!) my books at the following links...- Sonata Vampirica - Sonnets from the Labrador- How More Beautiful You Are- Tango Desolado- War and Ablution...And, if you can, please leave a rating at Amazon.com. It's easy, and it does help a lot. ...Thank you!