Almost There


The lantern threw the trees across the track
As we approached the town, as if to say
There was no time at all for turning back:

Already light had fallen from the day.
We had no need to slow, the town so near
Where we could find somewhere at last to stay.

Faint moon, the stars beginning to appear
Against the sinking of the evening sky;
We knew that soon the darkness would be here.

But no, we felt no need to question why.
Ahead the village lights stood white and clear
Where our two tracks met in a single tie.


27 comments:

  1. Good Morning Semaphore~ I loved this and the one below. You are one talented young man. Keep up the good work. Have a great day.

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  2. I could read this over and over... each time getting something new. I love this poem

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  3. Nice work.
    More than anything extremely vivid in detail.

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  4. Such kind words, thank you.

    Short link - http://bit.ly/s4almost

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  5. Great thoughtful poem. Thanks Samuel. Hope you get to see the moon and Mars tonight. Its been a great sight here in the UK, artistically inspiring.

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  6. very cool journey in this sam....very visual and easy to see as well...nice incorporating a bit of the internal feel as well...the two tracks meeting at the single tie is a great closing line...

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  7. I just knew you'd come up with something special, Sam - and you have. This is the type of poetry I aspire to; rich, deep, intelligent. You're rhyme, meter and rhythm are spot on. Poet awe...

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  8. Had me at the first line, Sam /the lantern threw the trees across the track/ and the form never seems to get in your way. Is this a variant form without the final couplet or stanza? I'm still such a cherry boy when it comes to FFA challenges.

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  9. oh i love the atmosphere in this sam....so very visual..i felt like i was right in the middle of the scene...and cool job on the sonnet as well...of course i didn't expect anything else from you...smiles

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  10. Just beautiful, Sam. What more can I say!!

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  11. I agree with Claudia, the atmosphere here is just great... I come to think about Robert Frost "Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening"

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  12. very beautiful piece - i love the mood here... pieceful through and through. love the line you start out with!

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    1. ... and of course it's *peaceful, duh.

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  13. Lovely work Sam, specially the last verse ~ The pattern flows beautifully too ~

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  14. Beautifully done.

    Anna :o]

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  15. Beautiful..."light fallen from the day..."

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  16. The opening line completely hooked me in...a perfect read!

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  17. A good poetic journey - perfect to the form. I generally try to avoid direct rhymes, but yours are most effective in setting the rhythm and pace.

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  18. And at the end of a long day of journey we see the lights of the perfect place to rest for the night.

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  19. Very atmospheric, that first line sets the scene beautifully. Very much enjoyed this wonderful sonnet!

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  20. there almost there by the day and night. A layered poem, as if there is is somethign to look forward always in a journey. Loved the closing line.

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  21. ...it feels like an end of a quite long departure Sam... the beginning part greatly portrays deep solitude until the coming of that lovely communion at the end... smiles... loved it!

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  22. ..the feeling of arriving, almost in a film noir sense for me, and the intimate relationship meeting the night..at least that's what I saw..love the R.R. tie merging. Perfect sonnet of course.

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  23. Amazing. For me the form and story meet in a perfect telling. I feel and hear the meter in a perfect beat as the poem unfolds.

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  24. Lovely, and gently romantic. Hmmm, a 12-line sonnet and/or a terza rima without the traditional closing rhyme. Does the title also allude to this?

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  25. Simply terza rima - it wasn't trying to be a sonnet. The poem took its own shape.

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