Punctual


The train's smoke drifts across the
space from where the doors slide back.
I step through to the platform,
searching, eyebrows arched like the
curve of a question mark.

On tiptoe, burgundy overcoat
billowing, beret, brick red, steeped high
above your head - there you are!
In the crowd, your flushed, expectant
Spanish exclamation point.

For a moment, life hyphenates
in a kiss, slows to a grand full stop.


14 comments:

  1. mmm, sweet visual here, warm and welcoming. A grand full stop.

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  2. Beautiful moment seized in time. Very nice!
    -Alex

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  3. Thank you comma everyone comma for the kind words full stop

    Short link - http://bit.ly/s4punctual

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  4. nice...not just a comma but a period that maybe leads to an elipses...like that playful punctuation embedded in an already cool scene

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  5. whoa! fabulous, playful: punctual/punctuation. You have it going on, Sam-- and needn't fret! xxxxj

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  6. Punctually perfect... "...life hyphenates in a kiss, slows to a grand full stop." Creative, clever!

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  7. Wonderful how you used puncuation as description and punctuation. Lovely poem.

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  8. Ok, I did not understand...

    "Spanish exclamation point."

    (As I am from India - can not work out the idiosyncrasies of the word play) but then the verse is so beautiful...

    But then you, I do understand your next lines... which are so perfect..
    "For a moment, life hyphenates
    in a kiss, slows to a grand full stop."
    I hope it does not.. Lovely write up..
    Thanks for sharing...

    Shashi
    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/11/whispers-tears-in-rain.html

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  9. Great play on words and structure, wonderful verse.

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  10. I thought this just wonderful, the play, the moment...awesome!

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  11. No hesitations to call this extraordinary play on words and a stunning poem. Always a pleasure to read your work, Sam. I loved this.

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